Katniss Everdeen from Catching Fire
Alfred was at his house one night waiting for his mom to get home from work. She got home around 7pm with dinner, while they were eating Alfred’s mom told him that his cousins were coming over for the weekend. Alfred got excited, he couldn't wait.
Today Alfred had boxing practice at 12:00 until 2:00. He got up around 9:30 am and ate a healthy breakfast, he had fruit with a protein shake to get ready for practice. Alfred went to practice around 11:30 to be early so he could stretch. During practice all Alfred does is work on body shots and avoiding punches... After practice Alfred went home to a nice surprise, his cousins were there. Katniss and Prim. Katniss is 15 and Prim is just a couple of years younger. Alfred asked Katniss if she wanted to walk to the park, she said “yes”. After Alfred showered and got changed, they started walking to the park.
“How have you been?” Alfred said.
“i’ve been good, it’s really boring in my district because we have to hunt and gather ourselves.”
Katniss replied. When they got to the park they walked around and Katniss said,
“This would a great spot to shoot some birds.” and Alfred said,
“Haha, you can't do that here in front of everybody!” “Do you want to go get some ice cream?” Alfred said.
“Sounds good” Katniss answered.
Alfred and Katniss walked across the street to the local ice cream shop. He offered to pay for her, they both got vanilla ice cream in a dish. The total came out to $4.85 and Alfred only had a five dollar bill. “Woah, got lucky there” Alfred said. When Alfred and Katniss got home there parents had dinner already made. They were having chicken off the grill.
“You could have asked me to hunt a chicken and bring it over.” Katniss said sarcastically.
After dinner, Katniss’s mom told Prim it was time to go the bed.
“But its only 8:00 o’clock!” Prim yelled.
“Doesn't matter, you need to get up early and come with us to Alfred’s boxing match.”
Everyone else went to bed around 9:30. The next morning, Alfred woke up at 8:00 at o’clock to eat breakfast and get ready for his boxing match. The rest of the family woke up at 8:30 to Alfred dropping a glass plate on the ground that shattered everywhere! The match was at 9:30 am and they had to leave by 9. When they got there Alfred went into the locker room with his coach while his family waited on the bleachers for him to box. While boxing Alfred has to wear a mouthguard and padded gloves. At 9:30, Alfred went up on the octagon and waited for the referee to blow the whistle. when the whistle was blown, both boxers went to the middle of the ring and tapped gloves to show they were ready. When the match started Alfred backed up with the rope and moved in a circle. His opponent did what he did and then Alfred moved in. He got the first punch, and avoided mostly all of his opponents punches. The match did not get the the second round and Alfred had already knocked him down with a brutal punch to the head. the referee started counting, 1, 2, 3.. Knockout win by Alfred.
After the match Alfred and his family went home. When they were home, Alfred’s aunt told him they had to leave to get home for the announcing of the hunger games participants. They packed everything up an before they left Katniss went up to Alfred and said
“Goodbye Alfred, i had a lot of fun this weekend!”
“Bye! i had fun too.” Alfred said.
After saying goodbye to everyone, Alfred and his mom went out to dinner to celebrate his victory.
I liked the story it was really interesting. As you were talking I could imagine every thing. The story made me think about how Katniss was related to Alfred, they don't really seem related.
ReplyDeleteDom didn't really decribe a whole lot about the setting.
Yes the dialouge did seem authentic. At some parts I can just picture them talking. Katniss talking about how the park would be a perfect place to shoot bird and then Alred told her not to because of all the people in the park.
One thing that I thought was problamatic was that at some parts your forgot to capitalize the words that shouldv'e been capitolized. You could fix that by re-reading it and fixing the mistakes.
Dom this was a well thought up plan to mix these to book`s main characters together. I enjoyed how you also included other characters from out the books. The conversation between Kat and Alfred was good cosidering they were cousins. I only saw that you did not indent where it needed to be a new paragraph. Otherwise overall, a job well done.
ReplyDelete1. while reading this i realized that a lot of the sentences were kind of run offs. it was a good story and well written. good descriptions and conversations between the two. the story made me think about how similar they both were.
ReplyDelete2. "Alfred went up to the octagon" i liked that that because it made me think of how the boxing rink was shaped and sounds though.
3. it made the characters seem real because you made the dialog sound good. you could have added a little bit more detail to make it sound better. but it was a good story.
3. your words could have been a little bigger and made it more sophisticating sounding.
Job well done again:)
ReplyDeletei like the overall format of your essay, your very detailed in your writing and very desriptive.
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